Monday, November 7, 2011

John's Declaration!

In my short time in your society, I have come to realize that it is corrupt and broken. Many times I tried to fix it, to give the people what should have been theirs. However, the harder I tried, the more this society tried to change ME. This so called “civilization” is fixed beyond repair, and so I declare independence from all of civilization and its sick and twisted ways.

When I first arrived, I expected knowledge and enlightenment beyond my imagination, however I am met with ignorance unlike any I have ever seen. All of your time is spent on drugs or in the bed. Don't you have time to think? Don't you have insights about yourself? Don't you want a more meaningful life? I ask all these questions, and all I get in return are dirty looks or blank expressions. Why not do something new?

This sick and twisted government controls you completely! You are all slaves to it, unwilling to fight. How can you be happy with what you are? How can you allow your government to tell you what to think? How can you allow it to block out your emotions like they never existed? This is crazy! They keep you from learning, they keep you from thinking, and they keep you from feeling anything that matters. This wont do. We all should have to option to choose. Eve must allowed to take the apple from the tree and live with the consequences. How can we be human without the hardships?

And whatever happened to love? Is that not relevant at all anymore? As soon as I tried to make a connection with someone, they just assumed I wanted to sleep with them! What madness is this? Can one not simply long for companionship without intimacy? I want to have a partner to care for, to hold hands with, walk on the beach, do heroic things for, and other thing of the sort. This sort of relationship demanded by your society is empty! There's no meaning or feelings involved. In fact, none of your society has any feeling other than pleasure. Its sex this and soma that. This wont do. I must abdicate myself from these sins, these lunatic ways of your people.
Your people don't even get the right to choose their fates. Before they are even born, your government determines exactly what they will be doing for the rest of their lives. Whether they will grow to be alphas or any other of your ridiculous castes, they don't have a choice! They don't even get the right to be unhappy with their positions. Your society trains them to accept their fate and neglect advancement! How cruel is that? Can you reduce a man down any lower than when he doesn't want to better himself?

No! This society is wrong! I don't belong here, and I don't plan on being here any longer. This society hold no interest to me, with the gigantic thumb these people live under. I desire to be free from your soma. I desire to be free from your ignorance. I desire to be free from your fake happiness. I desire to end all connection to your people and be free of their lustful ways. So thereafter, I declare independence from your warped society and it's people!
Ethos: Paragraph 3
Pathos: Paragraph 4
Logos: Paragraph 2, 5

6 comments:

  1. good job, par 4 is like a cry of pathetic-ness, then again mine could be worse.

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  2. I liked it, and I think your vocabulary adds to the overall tone. Great job!

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  3. I really liked your parrelism and your anaphora. I could really tell it was there and I felt the emotion build... Great essay!

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  4. Nice essay. I liked the word usage, and the emotions John would feel.

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  5. Great essay and word choice. I loved it.

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  6. I liked the questions you used. Great job

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